From reading my peer editing sheet, I hope in my final draft to include dialogue to increase interest in my story. Also, after I finish the narrative about my childhood mishap, I intend to tell a story from when I was in high school to create a parallel between my adult self and my child self relaying that the same lesson can be learned multiple times in one lifetime. I plan on dedicating the second part of my paper to this because the tennis team was a big part of my high school career and Coach Brummel especially made me have to live with the unexpected events in life. Although Brummel was not a positive influence on me, he enabled me to realize a lot about myself. I’ve never had to deal with working hard and not reaping the rewards and Brummel allowed me to witness that not all hard work is rewarded and again establish the unexpected events in life. I expected to receive a higher singles ranking on the team, but instead got the same ranking as the year before and moved ahead in doubles ranking instead.
As for revising, I plan to travel throughout the paper and make sure I have used plenty of description and creating visuals that can enable to reader to see what I am describing and see in my head. I also want to make sure I keep the same verb tense throughout the flashback section of my paper because it is very easy at times to slip from present tense to past tense without realizing I did so.
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